kitrosemon13

Thanks and no problem, I've been busy as well. I haven't even had enough time to writer another chapter.

Welcome the way I read it came off a negative, but to make this easier I suggest we both should stop bickering over this. Or I should stop, either way, ...

Thank you, and I have never heard of any of those songs though.

To KatTrain. Wow, I guess no one can see the meaning of poetry. When I wrote this it didn't come out of the blue. That was just a true attack ...

For a haiku this was not a real one. Mostly haiku's are about nature, for the mystery concept it wasn't really a mystery for me. This would be better if ...

Same as the poet above me said, where are the commas and the periods. My stars are fading... Away from the sky, These times turn dark, And I don't know ...

Standing in the rain, I look at you as it pours down your face. You look to me, with a helpless look in your eyes. I can't help but to ...

Nice, this does tell a story about love. And welcome to YWS, you're speaking as if you've been here for months in a since. You're punctuation is great, but you ...

Bravo and yes I agree! Men can be so confusing at times, so much feeling went into this, I can tell. Only one thing I saw wrong was this; [i] ...

I'm consumed in fire, and drenched with hate... All we need is love, no pain, no worries, no fights. As the wolf bellows to the moon, I see sight of ...

I liked this but the flow seems raged. A few commas would be good in it. Breaking it up into stanzas would also suffice. 'Laying on summer's edge..... The grass ...

Nice, I liked the idea of it. Oh and welcome to YWS! Here are a few pointer tips in the future, Hi, this is my very first poem and I ...

Ocean and seas the waves wash me, Salt drowns my lungs and I've lost my will to fly. To go on with life without you seems like a terrible crime. ...

Nothing will ever be like yesterday, so much hope and so much loss. The texture of your voice, the pain it holds within.. Like fire as it pants across my ...

I'm working on new chapters now, I'm going to add about two or three more chapters onto it. (: