kirstybree

Usually when I encounter poems without much punctuation I find it a bit confusing to pick up flow but not with this one. The simple format is clear and poignant. ...

Like the others before I really enjoyed the powerful simplicity of this piece but what really distinguished it for me was the last stanza. The first while beautiful could lend ...

Hey everyone this is the first short story I have ever finished so any and all feedback would be much appreciated. Also I am really unsure about the title so ...

Hey everyone this is the first short story I have ever finished so any and all feedback would be much appreciated. Also I am really unsure about the title so ...

First and foremost I enjoyed the imagery you used in this piece its what really makes it come alive for me. However,that being said there are a couple of recommendations ...

Overall I liked the progression/pacing of the poem. I think the short and simple style suited the message of the despair that unrequited love brings. However, like others have said ...

I saw the world in your eyes, Watched as time moved forward But I stood transfixed by your gaze. Moments led to days, days to years But I stood at ...

But upon all these memories, Nonen could compare to this, This photograph, with your smile, This photographm that i kept at heart.... You have a couple typos but other than ...

I love this. Its a unique take on something everyone has either experienced or witnessed. Everything works, the simplicity, the rhythm so I can't really give an awesome critique when ...

Hello there, Well first off I will start with the positive: I really like the way the images and rhythme create the feel of a dreamy young love. However I ...

Like the reviewer before me I definitely think the second stanza is the stronger of the two. However instead of starting with the second stanza I think you should just ...

Hello its me again! Well again right off the bat PUNCTUATION. I understand it is your right as the poet to write it however you feel fit but I think ...

This is very cutesy, which I am guessing you were going for. It has a feel of a nursery rhyme but the format in which you put it in is ...

I agree with the people before me the lack of punctuation needs to be fixed, without at least some commas and periods its all just one run on sentence. Punctuation ...

I really liked this especially the fourth stanza. Its a story everyone knows but told through a perspective teenagers easily forget. Good job :)