kinzygirl223

Hmmm. Interesting. Good. I couldn't spot any errors either. Good job. Really Good.

I thought it was a good story overall. I have the basically same critic as the other guy. Punctuation, spacing, less dialoge. You get the point. At some areas it ...

I thought it was good. Very entertaining. There were some punctuation problems though. Watch out for those. I can't wait for you to write more.

i liked it it had a lot of feeling. I dont think it matters that its short i loved it.

I thought it was good. Still i thought that there was a few things wrong. The way everyone is always saying stuff simultaously is actually annoying at times. Try using ...

I finally calmed down, and he let go me. "Are you alright now?" "No." "I am so sorry." His eyes showed the worry they had had before. "I'll make it ...

Wow that was really good short story. I was very interested. It made you feel warm when the kissed. Great job. You should write more.

Hmmmm. I dont think i get it. Sorry. It just doesn't work for me.

I thought it was pretty good. I thought it was a little awkward.

I liked it. I thought the word choice was very good. I think you should add on to the story. It could be a great story. :) :) :) :) ...

I think you should write down the topic of the other stories in your mind. Still continue on your novel. You wouldn't want all of those ideas to go away. ...

i liked it a lot. I thought it had good meaning. Try making it flow better though. It would be easier to read and understand that way.

I liked it. Very entertaining Keep adding to it. I agree though you need to put more spaces in. :D :D :D :D :D :D

I dont get it. ARe you sick then dead. I thought it was very hard to follow. Still enjoyable though

Wow. That was really cool I liked it. I found it a little hard to follow at times. Still fantastic.