kingolions

Trash it. I know you want to. ---------------------------- I see the pain in the eyes of those I love. I hear the screams of those who have no hope. I ...

Yeah! 1st review! *Feels shot by BenFranks* Bring it Review Day!

Hey. Welcome to YWS. I thought that this was great. It was powerful and the message was clear. I thought it had a very good flow, which doesn't happen much ...

Hey. I thought that this was really good. I thought it had a really good and consistent rhythm to it, and a more subtle rhyming that was really good and ...

Hey Coter. I have to say, (and possibly for the first time) I agree with Random. It did feel like this poem when nowhere. It also seemed a little edgy ...

Hey Will. I thought that this, let's just say, wasn't a bad poem. It had a good flow in it, but you seemed too reliant on the rhyming. The rhyming ...

I wrote this a bit ago, so I though I might post it. And it's a little different to what I usually write. -------------------------------- So soft were your eyes, and ...

Hey Fiction. This was interesting. It was creative and new, and not something you would normally find. I think you did well on it, but there was one problem I ...

Hey. I thought that this was great. It was well written, meaningful, and powerful. It flowed well, and the rhyming seemed natural and smooth. I thought it was really good, ...

Hey. I thought that this was a good attempt on an unusual poetry topic. I found that the part that seemed a little off was the middle. I'm not sure ...

Hey. I have tried haiku's before, and I think you did infinitely better than me. I found that they flowed well, and I don't know if they were supposed too, ...

Hey. I thought this was great. I understood what you were saying, and felt what you were trying to put across. I thought the idea of holding on was great, ...

Hey. Welcome to YWS. Always good to seen new work. I really like this poem. I thought it was meaningful, but a little cliche. The only problem I have with ...

This was the first of the Misfortunate Happenings that I wrote. It seems with the others, I was a hit and miss. I think with this one I missed. Just ...

It's not that great, but I wrote it while listening to a song. Thought you might be able to help me make it better. Every day without you, I feels ...