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I looked into your soft blue eyes, and I see what could have been. More than talking, laughing and joking, peaceful with the haunting truth. The truth of how I ...

‘Why run from that which we know will catch us? Hide and you shall find the safety in the unawareness of your pursuer.’ Chapter 1 -Two years later A harsh ...

This is just an idea i had, and will probably change it a lot. Tell me what you think, so I know how to shape it. We say fire is ...

‘Who are we to change the destiny that has been set for us, but not to change the meaning of the way we act?’ Prologue MASTER MIDDLE MINOR. That was ...

Hey. I do agree with what the others have said. It needs to flow smoothly. The grammar is one of the big things for me. I have written a few ...

Hey. I do like your poem. I think it is good, but I don't really like how it changes style half way through. It is a good idea, but if ...

Hey. This is a very good poem. Normally, when I review or leave comments, I leave a bit of criticism, but I don't think there is anything to criticize. What ...

This is just something quick I wrote during class. It's not great, but I tried. Tell me what you think. ----------------------------------------------- The flow of tears fell like the swell of ...

Hey. I did like the poem, but I think a lot along the same lines of the others. I do however want to say that I don't agree about what ...

This is my first semi romantic poem. It isn't that great, but tell me what I can do to make it better. You turned and looked into my eyes. I ...

Hey, It is a good poem, but not all of it makes sense. I do like the part about the knife. Is it meant to be like a thing of ...

Hey, It was a really good poem. It is well written, but I would look at changing the 'me' to 'myself'. But other than that, I think it was good. ...

Hey, I was looking at the comment you left me and decided I will have a look at you story. I'm glad I did. It was really good. It is ...

This is my first poem that I have made to rhyme. I hope it is okay. I am no more than what is told, but spread and unraveled to those ...

It is really good. I like the use of the burnt hole, and how it need to be sealed. And I agree, it does make me think about what I ...