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i liked it.i think it a good opening for somthing biger.

i realy liked this story!i was alittle confused in the begining. i could not get a good picture of what you wwere talking about.i did like how it flowed and ...

i am not very good at this reveiw thing but i LOVED this was very smoth and flowed very well.i have read many poems on this site, and i thought ...

i like the message you were trying to convey,but it was alittle....i agree with boolovesyou.

i agree with all that emmzziee said.:)

i agree with green finnch.i dont know what but it was lacking....heres a good way to put it, its like a perfictly frosted cake except the cake was made out ...

aww...i thought it was very sweet.i loved at the end when she felt like he was saying no but then he sied i can related with that emotions so i ...

i liked it but wasn't there saposed to be commas or periods to to a line and idea?

umm...i can see in parts of your story you were trying the be sassy or sarcastic with your caracter but i think it fell shart because you have no details ...