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This was a really cute story! It was really funny and sassy...the sixth part I could have lived without, seemed rather cliche what with Ethan suddenly being like "Oh Toby ...

I like the ending to this story, it is tragic and somewhat uplifting at the same time. Very sweet. However, I would have liked to get to know the characters ...

This story had an excellent voice to it. It was all very mysterious and sweet. However, I didn't like the fact that Gabriel was an angel. I was actually thinking ...

Thanks N! No, she is not ready to go inside, not at all, but she merely says, "Yes, darling, I'm ready." I love how you use darling , it reminds ...

Please, space your paragraphs out!! I started to read it but it just got to be too much...space it out, then I'll read the rest...

Wow, this was...exciting. Very different. This is the first "mutts" story I read and I must say I like it! You had me at the second paragraph when it mentions ...

Hi Fang, I liked this, it made me want to read more and find out what was going to happen (an effect of the nice cliffhanger ending!) My only concerns ...

Immediately after the words leave her tongue, she regrets them. Damn! She has made a terrible mistake. You changed perspective for a second there. =P This is pretty cool. I ...

I basically liked this. It had a smoothness to it that was kind of comforting but wasn't really different at all. Some grammatical errors: It felt so good knowing he ...

She squints in the light. It isn’t the first time she has been outside; nor will it be the last, but the sunlight is still stunning to her. The brightness ...

Wow. That was amazing. Disturbing, but...wow.

Hmm. I must say that, after reading "One day he just stopped talking" I was expecting something a bit more complicated, or mysterious, than him just getting back together with ...

Wow. This was very good! Very effective and emotional. And I think the rhyming works very well.

I like this, good voice, very honest and realistic. Sharp and funny. I'm looking forward to reading more entries!

Hi Night, I liked this poem. It was uplifting, not depressing or angsty, which I liked a lot; you don't find poems like that often, especially ones written by teens. ...