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Re: We All Fall Down
First, you need paragraphs. Maybe you just didn't seperate them from your text but it makes it easier to review. Ok...*Kathy cracks knuckles and continues with her review.... :D Be ...
Apr 5, 2011 -
Re: Hi people
Welcome to the YWS family! Hope to read some works soon! :D
Apr 5, 2011 -
Re: Umm....hello there :)
Hey Scatterheart, We welcome you greatly! When I was in school I was very shy and wanted to be an author. Luckily, my skills have improved since then but I'm ...
Apr 5, 2011 -
Re: The Inkwell - 1/5
He yawned, took a sip of his (supposed to be bitter but always ends up too sweet to stomach) drink, set down the mug, and started to read. The parts ...
Apr 5, 2011 -
Re: Halloween Night
I saw a couple of grammar errors. Here goes my review! Hope this helps! no idea what there going to say Don't forget the different words that sound alike! This ...
Apr 5, 2011 -
Re: You...Whoever You Are
Just my 2 cents.. megsug - Believe me, (I don't know if you're Male or Female) but if you're ever pregnant one of these days - trust me - you ...
Apr 5, 2011 -
Re: Night In Love ~ prologue
Very good piece! I hope to read more soon! Keep me informed and I'll comment on more! :) I have a problem pronouncing strange names but that's just me. You ...
Apr 5, 2011 -
Re: number 1.
Good job. Sorry I don't have much input but I like this opening. I see great potential and I like your style of writing.
Apr 5, 2011 -
Re: Same Old Story
This could be a very cool song! you did a great job on this and i love the rhyming. Very nice. Unfortunately, I don't have any negative comments for you ...
Apr 5, 2011 -
Re: I can't make you love me.
I saw a couple of grammatical errors. heart new the way our relationship worked. This was how we killed each other emotionely. This was not the first time Maybe reword ...
Apr 5, 2011 -
Re: The World of Photoshop.
Creepy picture, but I like it. I feel like I'm being watched. I work in a high school and I feel like printing that out and putting it on the ...
Apr 5, 2011 -
Re: Haunting Darkness
Unlike the word who gives out pain so cruelly I had to slow down reading the poem to read this line. It seemed kind of long and took the flow ...
Apr 5, 2011 -
Re: Unicorns VS Zombies
I really like the idea. Your title drug me in like a bug to a light zapper. Interesting creatures to have together. Once you make corrections, I look forward to ...
Apr 5, 2011 -
Re: Ghost's Betrayal
“Stay there” I sprinted down to Ghost hoping that he was still alive. Your friend needs to have "Stay there," I yelled as I sprinted down to Ghost hoping he ...
Apr 5, 2011 -
Re: The Portraits Over Christmas
I love the drawings! I wish I could draw people as well as you can! I love the shadows and the girls' smiles! Great job!
Apr 4, 2011