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Re: Fights and Kisses
Thanks, no it's meant to be lower case on the frist quote and on the second, maybe I need a comma? No they didn't kiss, she was going to kiss ...
Apr 21, 2011 -
Re: Fights and Kisses
Fights and kisses Oh how I wish I could say, How I feel about you today. I have known this a little while, I think maybe we’re both in denial. ...
Apr 21, 2011 -
Re: In The Attic (Chapter 1 Revised)
I will do a better review when you post in paragraphs. I know it takes a few extra minutes, but if you put forth the effort, others will too in ...
Apr 21, 2011 -
Re: Hell of a School
Being a teacher's aide, I could argue some points but I'm not here to critique how you feel about the poem. I'm here to critique the poem not opinion. I ...
Apr 21, 2011 -
Re: Just Listen...
I kept reading and wondered fi you were going to say something important...just telling me to listen but I listened and didn't get anything from ti. THe first 3 stanzas ...
Apr 21, 2011 -
Re: The One
This is a pretty cool poem! I like to see your poems. I don't have any negative feedback for you. I like the descriptions and how you rhymed it.
Apr 19, 2011 -
Re: Her Eyes Of Gray
You did really well on this poem. I didn't notice any grammar mistakes to point out. If there were - I didn't see them. I'm following you . I hope ...
Apr 18, 2011 -
Re: Mailboxes and Hesitation
This is very interesting. I hope the letter gets sent. Are you going to write more? I love the depth you have . I like being able to visualize the ...
Apr 18, 2011 -
Re: 1. Prologue
It seems like it's flowing fast. I caught this as interesting since I'm writing a short story about a teenage boy who is a dragon. It seems interesting enough though ...
Apr 18, 2011 -
Re: Cherry Blossoms and my puppy!
Very beautiful tree and puppy! I love the focus on the puppy and the details of the cherry blossom tree. It will make a nice computer background if someone wanted ...
Apr 18, 2011 -
Re: A Lesson In Love
I'm not that great at poetry either but once in a while one "POPS" into my head. This was a very well written and itneresting poem. I like poem that ...
Apr 15, 2011 -
Re: Unexpected: Chapter 1
“Look April, honey, you’ll feel a lot better if you talk about it.” I don't know who's talking to April until the next line, and I'm assuming. There could be ...
Apr 15, 2011 -
Re: The Truth in Lying
This is a very good speech. I hope to see some more work from you. Don't forget to review others' works as well! Also, welcome to YWS. 8)
Apr 15, 2011 -
Re: Alexandra Chapter 2 Final
Thank you so much for the reviews! I'm glad I have at least one person reading as I post the newest version. I hope I can keep this up. Work ...
Apr 15, 2011 -
Re: Alexandra Chapter 2 Final
2 “Never mind Alex. I meant…well you’re like a sister to me.” Joshua hesitated. “Well then let’s head to the gates. Let’s get this day over. Maybe the sooner we ...
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