kamorama

Alrighty! Seeing as the others got to my more nitpicky stuff, I'll go for the overall story. To begin, some parts of your story seemed to take up a little ...

Wonderful! I love it when I get to read another piece of a story I like. SinceI haven't been on in awhile, I like being greeted with a story I ...

Well, I have to say that your work definately has it's own flair of words. I liked it a lot more than I thought I would. There were a few ...

Very very interesting. I like it, a lot. There are a few nitpicks that I'd like to point out however. it lasted for several moments, Evalynn savoring each one This ...

Now comes the fun part. All-in-all, I think you've done an excellent job portraying your characters. I really like the way you make them similar but still different, because they ...

Just as good, if not better than the first. Wonderful. Now, only one thing really bugged me through the thing, and that was that Peter seemed kind of bland to ...

Wonderful! You posted a third chapter. Thank you so much. Anyway, on to the fun part of this. All-in-all, there seems to be a lot of slow moving chapters here. ...

Well... I guess that most the things I would have said have been completely stolen from my mouth... both critiques and compliments. Great story, just go over what the others ...

First of all, this sounds like a very good story. I wonder what could happen next... well, plenty could happen but I guess it's up to you. Now, on to ...

My only problem really with the text was this; He opened a drawer, and felt around, intill his hands... It should be until, but I'm pretty sure that's just a ...

One of the specific things I noticed was that some of your sentances don't fit witht the rest of the paragraph. I don't know exactly what it is that bugs ...

I have to apologise for this before I write it, but this story goes very slowly. There isn't enough information to draw me in and make me interested in the ...

Wow! If it makes you feel better, I have never heard of this myth and I enjoyed it. I think you captured the essence well. (I went googling and looked ...

Eep... I have seen Dollhouse and I hope I never have to again... Anyway, thank you for posting more, even though I just read the first chapter. Very interesting. I ...

I think in my review I have to agree with quite a few people on this one. I'd like a little more of a description of the setting. What is ...