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Very very interesting. I like it, a lot. There are a few nitpicks that I'd like to point out however. it lasted for several moments, Evalynn savoring each one This ...

Oh boy... let's see. I don't have many books that I hate. 1) Twilight by Stephenie Meyer. (That woman knows how to writer, sure, but she doesn't know how to ...

What can I say? I'm outvoted. In my oppinion it's better to have two villains, one you love and one you hate. Like Smeagol, you love his good side and ...

Banned because you're finally confused.

Villains are so much fun to discover and write about, and yet, at times I feel that some people can't get the villain right. In my own oppinion a good ...

Wonderful! Such a unique style. Other than what tRiCK pointed out, I think thatyou've got a wonderful story started.

Banned because you're not.

Banned for banning Ranger Hawk.

Now comes the fun part. All-in-all, I think you've done an excellent job portraying your characters. I really like the way you make them similar but still different, because they ...

Thank you all for the great reviews. I think I've fixed the things you mentioned.

Banned for having a confusing location!

Just as good, if not better than the first. Wonderful. Now, only one thing really bugged me through the thing, and that was that Peter seemed kind of bland to ...

Wonderful! You posted a third chapter. Thank you so much. Anyway, on to the fun part of this. All-in-all, there seems to be a lot of slow moving chapters here. ...

Well... I guess that most the things I would have said have been completely stolen from my mouth... both critiques and compliments. Great story, just go over what the others ...

Banned for having your location as "the land of the dead"