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Re: Water
I started to read and I had to look at the title again because I forgot what you were talking about. Good ideas though. It changes the way you think ...
Aug 30, 2009 -
Re: Polluted Lives
Thanks for the review. I plan on using your suggestions when I get a chance to edit the exert. Thanks again and glad you liked it, i was hoping people ...
Jun 28, 2009 -
Re: Polluted Lives
This is just the beginning exert that I wrote. There is much more to this chapter then this little bit, but this is what I have written confidently so far. ...
Jun 27, 2009 -
Re: "Alone" Prologue
This is a recent story idea I came up with. The idea of the prologue is to just set up the story. It gives you a hint into the kind ...
Jun 4, 2009 -
Re: Extra! Extra! Will Critique for Food!
peanutgallary007... Finished! Hope it helps!
Mar 29, 2009 -
Re: First page of Sensing Wild
Ok here I am. Just so you know I bolded parts in certain paragraphs and then explain them below which is also bolded. If something didn't bold right I apologize. ...
Mar 29, 2009 -
Re: Extra! Extra! Will Critique for Food!
Hey everyone! I've recently been finding myself with some free time I figure that I would like to critique some work, but my computer is slow in loading recently so ...
Mar 27, 2009 -
Re: Moving on
wasn't bad. Uh I can't critique poems but you asked. I like the idea of like how it like summer then winter cause of the sun and the snow. Good ...
Mar 25, 2009 -
Re: Does the city sleep?
I used this poem as extra credit for my Language Arts class...enjoy! ___________________________________________________________________________________ Does the city sleep? Daylight brings noise and
Mar 20, 2009 -
Re: Naruto
I looked up some info on the rock village :) ____________________________________________ "Now!" Kuzon had met three guards at the edge of the village. One went to gather more ninja's, while ...
Feb 3, 2009 -
Re: Naruto
Kuzon- Walking along the outer border of the rock village Kuzon noticed a faint vibration that he had not felt before on his usual walk. Quickly stopping he focussed his ...
Feb 2, 2009 -
Re: Naruto
Ok I hope I remember everything if not I'll add on later... Name: Kuzon Gender: Male Village: Rock Village (I wanted to go out of the box even though I ...
Feb 2, 2009 -
Re: Here It Goes Again. Another YWS FanFic
When Nate gives his long speach right before they charge the noobs is like a total Lord of the Rings moment. Which is only one reason why I liked it. ...
Dec 26, 2008 -
Re: Fastlane
I felt that this was very good. It does feel a little repetive but most lyrics do. It does seem as if you have two choruses: "just give me the ...
Dec 26, 2008 -
Re: Two by Two
I liked the poem I thought it flowed well overall but there was one spot in the middle where it sounded a little awkward when read a loud (most likely ...
Dec 19, 2008
