joshuapaul

here you go, Jash

Ha! I was hoping to feel enlightened at the end of it, as though you were framing something deeper with this rant stylistic alternative. But I didn't, that's okay though. ...

I will be back for you.

Charlie, why don't you take a look at this for me.

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The Magnificent Humphrey Wolf Adams He was bent and sucking like a landed carp. His eyes vacant, peering out at the canvas from looped bruise – oddly, it reminded him ...

I would like to think I had something to do with this (the posting of the poem, not the poem itself, of course.) Or more likely it was a case ...

I am unqualified to truly critique this, I must say. Whenever I critique poetry I feel inadequate, the fool choking down popcorn at the theatre, or the kids in black ...

Ah, and more comes. Lovely.

Want more points? Write more reviews, but don't write them for the points, write them because you will grow as a writer. Writing reviews trains your eyes to spot errors, ...

I will be careful with this. I am eager to critique it, but the stock templates (regarding show don't tell , cliches, extraneous observations) won't do. This is damn good. ...

I'm coming, trust me. I haven't forgotten to get to review this, just a little busy. Back soon.

Okay so Twit gave this a decent once over and I will try not to repeat anything she has already said. For me the problem with this is an accumulation ...

Congrats on being published. The writing itself is sound. However this is blighted with cliches and at times weak imagery/writing. Blue = Weak writing Red = Cliche “What is going ...