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This doesn't belong here. This belongs on pages, real pages, pressed and bound between card. The story, the plot, the concept are all pro. It's not really rough but could ...

Not accepting for a short while. Reviewed: - less than 3000 words - short stories - first chapters of novels Not reviewed - Poetry - Full Novels It's simple, really. ...

hey there, JP here. I am working on a novel and, although my first chapter got plenty of decent reviews, I don't think my second one will draw quite as ...

I will be brief because this needs a lot of work and I've never been one for nit picking. I will focus on the opening - this is my forte ...

31 days I had been wide eyed and flat on my back for over two hours when I heard the muffled blaring from Phil’s room up the hall. After only ...

Hi there, Hope this helps My name is George Fuller. This is my life. *** Sarah brought me the mail today. She carried the envelopes tucked squarely under her armpit ...

Thanks for your advice. I have believe it or not done a tonne of research into infection in humans. The idea for the story spawned from a dog attack in ...

Hi there, I'm currently working on a novel and have posted the first couple of chapters here: any advice/critique would be hugely appreciated. I plan to work through 1-2 chapters ...

With a hand full of reviews I had assumed someone would have given you some insight into the pieces shortcomings - not only its strengths. I'll try help you out ...

I started reading this and it seemed decent. I may come back and do a decent review but for now I will just say 7000 words is probably too long ...

The painful silence of the hallway was tearing me apart. My eyes were pink and swollen and I had almost backed out of coming to school today. The throbbing in ...

This is a concept and first draft for a lengthy piece of fiction. I plan to write about the last 31 days of a young man's life who contracts the ...

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Hi Kylan, First, let me say It is so difficult to extract any critique from a work as well written as this. Every word plays its role, contributes to what ...