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30 Days My clock was still running askew but I had held sleep off until almost nine the night before. I slept through until around six; midway through Phil’s morning ...

Hmm this is pretty good. I adore the beginning; I read it half a dozen times. I couldn't find any glaring issues with GPS and the story, despite its brevity ...

This is good. I think grammatically its almost perfect, but don't take my word for it I'm not one for nitpicking. I guess for me the only issue with it ...

[center] The Flash It sent a chill down his spine. cliché He tightened the heavy coat around him how? I mean how did he tighten it? This falls a little ...

Wow 9,000 words... I think you will be hard pressed to find someone that will randomly critique this for you. If you are interested in getting some serious feed back ...

If you can't deduce any significant data from this study, I'm sorry but you're a troll. What? Tossing troll in when you're claiming lie detectors to a mythological study are ...

I think this is the original but this is not the only instance in which this test has been conducted but I hope this answers your query. I originally encountered ...

Well, that was interesting. The thing is, I didn't get that he killed himself until i reread the end a few times. Maybe you should hint more at what he ...

Great story

I'm sorry, I could not get past this part. Post nullified. Lie detectors are one of the most flawed devices on the planet. Easily manipulated and subject to bias. post ...

Hey Nathaniel, hope this helps. I read the first few lines and let a malicious blood thirsty grin stretch ear to ear. I was expecting the rest to be as ...

Hi there, This might be harsh. But you are young and you have done very well. I'll try keep it relevant. A/N: This story takes place during medieval times. I ...

A while ago a study was done. 50 people edit: the prevailing version of this study was conducted over 25,000 people , perhaps more , were attached to a lie ...

Hey Jaymee, Hope this helps... I sped through the thick undergrowth, my thudding feet and rasping breath exaggerated by the stillness of the night. Twigs and branches whipped at my ...

Chapter 2: Drew “Wha-what?” I asked, my voice shaking. I just couldn't process it. It was like I had a mental block preventing me from making the connection between the ...