joshuapaul

Artemis covered it for the most part but here is my take. [ The city was loud enough before the war. Great opener. Eloquently sets the scene. On its own, ...

Sorry lies, that was harsh. I didn't want to ruin it for the people who haven't seen. But,the reason you are wrong is Steve Carrells character, Cal, doesn't fall in ...

Have you seen it? Because you were wrong. That's all I will say. I had the same mindset as you, but give it a chance. It's much better than you ...

Hi there, I will go over a few things you tend to do in your writing, that you may want to change. Then I will give you my overall impression. ...

This seems almost quaint. I did enjoy I must say. I used to run a sales team for solar panels in Melbourne and most of the installers were Indonesian. We ...

Twin, I would love to review this but I shouldn't. I will say one thing though by repeating 'You know the feeling' you waste a lot of words. I think ...

This is the product of too much fan-fiction, six episodes of Camelot in two days, and much time spent Wikipedia-ing the Tudors. I rather like it :) Please review! Ha ...

Here, as requested. I should tell you now I don't often critique or read poetry so I can't be as helpful as others but I will say I liked this. ...

Me and my belle.

The frolicking pony is very pretentious so he always skipped around trees. When suddenly groundhogs attacked nearby settlers who were smoking some turkeys. Howling winds blasted rifles, the men graspe

I'm going to quote E. M. Forester on this. The king died, and the queen died. -> Not a story. This is a narrative, a sequence of events. A story ...

25 Days In my opinion, this is the weakest chapter of the 6 I have written. I am looking for a critique on how it flows? If all the information ...

Wow, this is touching. Can I ask, is this true? Any way one nitpick. do you even know our favorite color? or even our day of life? You seem to ...

I seldom make a bad decision about what I see at the theatre. In an age where the latest films are just a click away, it's difficult to justify spending ...

edit: Accidentally hit submit prematurely. OK so, the first thing I noticed was the lay out of this. I'm no expert but I think as a rule of thumb: lyrics ...