joshuapaul

Okay I will do a brief line - by - line. Carefully, so I don’t wake the sleeping humans, I trudge downstairs for a drink of water. It's good that ...

Wow, Confetti. Wow. I'm so happy to see this, to experience this. I was really looking forward to your response to my challenge, and my have you delivered. I wish ...

There is a lot to be said about this story thus far, little intrinsic errors that I don't have the time to go over with you. I will say two ...

Two songs, cycling.

This was good. I don't have time now for a full critique. One thing did strike me however they’ve to shield their eyes they've is they have , abbreviated. So ...

Let me begin by saying, you really put yourself out there with this, so I commend you. When you say you wrote it for a friend, do you mean for ...

A quick review before I go to bed. I won't bother with nitpicks, it was short and as far as GPS goes, there was nothing glaring. So I turn to ...

The biggest problem with this is the intro. Rework it, because as it stands it isn't very good at all. It isn't a hook, you seem to dive straight into ...

Take it easy. I suspect the author didn't write this for admiration, nor to get it featured. It's such a cute little nickname too.

This is good, I enjoyed it. I won't delve into a full critique for now maybe I will come back to it. The main reason I replied is to show ...

And herein lies the fallacy of YWS. I had never read this, and in the section 'recommended for you' the formula spews out generic teen-angst poetry and joke stories I ...

Wow thanks Sarg, I've taken it all to heart and amended it. Will PM response. Just an A/N for future reviewers, it's set in NZ so terms like 'the vietnam ...

Ha, well done. Clever indeed! I drink to you, my far-way love, and bid you ramble on. Lovely. Can I ask, does this conform to a style of poetry? I'm ...

This is great, well done.

A Critique, I request good sir!