joshuapaul

I really should try writing poetry, then perhaps I would have a little more authority when it comes to reviewing it. But here I am, take it or leave it. ...

I tried to get through this, I really did. And I got maybe half-way. But seriously please sort out the formatting, it is just something us YWS'ers have to get ...

You have a knack for writing very (very) short poetry. I like it. This isn't nearly as strong as the last work of yours I read. It still conveys a ...

This isn't bad, but how long do you want this track to be? It seemed like a lot of lyrics for just one song. Am I funny, am I well-dressed? ...

Band of Horses, best track by far.

The writing here is strong and the image you conjure, particularly at the close, is crisp and enticing. I don't have too much to say about the story, for me ...

The group stopped on a small tiled patio outside the facility. As the group paused, Markus took the opportunity to see what the outside of the building looked like. The ...

This is fantastic. Well, for the most part, you could make the image a little stronger in the second part. I found two lines particularly cumbersome and wasteful. I, in ...

Hi there, The title definitely fits this piece, if I can say so. As I watched the scheduled (?) rain at my dark window, I thought of you. In the ...

hmm, can one really review a review? I won't try. But I will say that you need to break this up into paragraphs. And as the days pass, it becomes ...

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I assume this is the first part of a novel? It wasn't a complete story, that's for sure. I did enjoy it though, it was a rather fresh take on ...

Hello, Let's begin shall we. At some time, at some place in this immiscible world, what mixed up our two hapless worlds together was a single paper plane. Not the ...

Wow this is lovely. I wish you would do away with the authors note, though. It's clear what this is about and if you must keep it, place it in ...

The other reviewers seemed to cover it for the most part. I will say something about clichés, though. My heart pounded. My head throbbed. These are both glaring clichés, even ...