jonny911

I;m should be I'm Other than that, your story is still very awesome. I'm starting to like your humor more and more, too. The fight scene is fine, too. Good ...

The interlude was confusing but interesting, and that's probably how you wanted it. "reading to much weird fantasy” make it too much Overall, it was great, had a Heroes feel ...

monosyllabically I know you mean.... I don't know what you mean. Remember, the best words are short, specific, and easy to understand. Some of the words you choose made your ...

Isn't he? Kidding! Anyways, I think that holidays are becoming to materialistic, but I really like holidays. It's just a kind of day where everyone stops arguing and comes together, ...

Banned for dissing blood, vomit, snails, whales, hobos, and vomit. Not that I like those things (Except for whales and hobos)

8/10 I'm partial to Harry Potter

DANGEROUS INK by Jonathan Hyde Chapter IV: All’s not right in paradise I could feel the wind pushing against the bottom of the basket as we lowered. The Commena’s wings ...

Funny! You set it up really well, and the delivery was good to. I'm not so sure about this sentence Greetings, land mammals. It's just to overused a joke and ...

Good job! You really built up the plotline and the drama. Not really much to say, it was good and well-written. Can't wait to read more!

Overall, good work! You did a good job of expressing your feelings about the ponies, if it were a bit overdramatic. You didn't give me anything about your characters beyond ...

DANGEROUS INK By Jonathan Hyde Chapter III: A Convoy of Angels My captor tossed the bone it was working on off the ledge and ambled towards me. I had been ...

I definitely don't think I'll be reading that story anytime soon, Errant. But I must say that they sound like you've put tons of work and blood (a lot, it ...

Way improved from the old version. It really grabs my attention. Can't wait to read more!

Thanks you guys! I think I was probaly a little to crazed off the book I read when I posted this. So, I think I'll try to "challeng or re-interpret ...

Once there was a monster who spoke only about bubble gum. He thought that he should take a lesson about bubbles and rubber bands. He could jump over the river ...