jonny911

Hello guys (and gals)! I'm Jonny (the 911 is for show). I'm in 7th grade here in Brockton. I'm writing a big story for a creative writing project this year, ...

If your story is really like you tell it, I'll be hitting my computer with a hammer and getting a psychotic grammar tutor within the next week. :)

I don't like it. The name sounds really common. Also, Stuart is a strange spelling. It almost seems like is spelt wrong, even though it isn't. I'd rethink your "last" ...

Lithuanian? WHere did you learn Lithuanian (please tell me Oh, and good thing you like cats. They are way better than dogs. *Hears boos* :mrgreen: cool name. Jonathan is sooo ...

any genre is fine, except for romance. I'm horrible at romance. I'd perfer fantasy, but anything is fine. Oh yeah, and if you don't have any story ideas, you can ...

What happened to Chuck Norris?

It's interesting but you present the facts in a boring, repetitive way. I've you had been a little more focused on "fun" and less on "facts" (semi-metaphorically speaking) then it ...

finally, someone who appreciates swim gogles! and for the story... thank god for randomness

simple, yet genius Way to go!

Hello! I'm new at YWS but you'll be seeing a lot more of me. I wanted to write a short story, but I have no ideas, so I decided to ...

You'll definitely find the comments more helpful than hurtful. I'd type up the story now and see what feedback you get.

I really like it. I feel you really rushed through chapter 1 but chapter 2 is very good! Still, feel free to slow down a bit. I feel you aren't ...

great idea! I'd read it!

Very helpful! I don't get that temperature thing, but I'll get over it!

But nothing matters