jones32

hey, this was ok, but i felt it lacked originality. also there wasn't realy a rythm, so the words didn't flow as i read them. try reading it out loud ...

Entry for Wiseman's poetry competition. Foreign streets General moon with her Host of stars is out, And so are we. Mingling amongst fellow Revellers, all flocking Towards the same destination- ...

Eternally Incomplete So many unfinished lines, Black scrawls that sit Above blank page Contrasting so sharply Against that seemingly Vast tundra of paper. It would seem impossible To fill a ...

DARK LIGHT Prologue A thousand sparks danced skyward for a brief moment, before being lost to the enfolding darkness of a starless sky. The hooded figure retrieved his staff from ...

A Thousand Splendid Suns

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Awsomely awsome

hey, thanks for the comments, i'll edit the poem accordingly cheers

This was frikin good maaan! I usually get bored reading long poems, but this held my attention all the way through. I couldn't pick out any punctuation or spelling mistakes, ...

Hey! Nice poem. I liked the way it flowed. The rythm and rhyming went well to create a solid platform, from which the ideas were launched with precision. I think ...

The Sun I am like the planets as they revolve around The centre of the solar system. Your gravity, I can't resist A force akin to magnetism, but so much ...

Travels above the clouds. I took a trip today, Journeyed above the clouds. Lumbering through the sky, I pondered on what the graceful birds Think when they see, that poor ...

Hey! Really good poem. Short and sweet: I like! I liked the flow and the rythm was very good, coupled with the rhyme it made for a sweet read. The ...

Thank you summer. Thank god for summer, Balmy beauty makes me feel so fine Bright sunshine seems never ending, Could lie still for ever, Just watching the cotton bud clouds, ...

hey! awsum poem. I won't try and critique it as all the points have probably been covered above. There is a brilliant use of vocab, in that i can visualise ...