jesseadamw

"I like the dark though – with it, definition is lost – like the mist" This was my favorite description, although your imagery, in general, is amazing. I definitely got ...

Sorry nothing is capitalized. Also this is an excerpt from a larger body of work I am writing, so it may not be totally clear in terms of plot. I ...

First off, the first line caught my attention quickly! Great job! I also like the simple structure of your sentences, short and succinct, although I feel this is my own ...

I really enjoy the pace of the introduction, how we are instantly placed in the narrator's world. Even though this is a short piece, your voice is definitely developed and ...