jenna

Oh & also, we're only supposed to have 2 paragraphs :P. I guess this is just a very oddly formatted essay.. haha.

Thanks so much to both of you :), but for the "I" statements, my teacher actually tells us to do that =/. I don't know why, but I think that's ...

This is really good. You have explained both sides and have backed them up well with strong points. :D I can't think of anything that you can improve on. good ...

Hi Jenna, Two things, really quick, because I don't have a lot of time. Quotes can't stand on their own, meaning, they can't be a sentence all to themselves; i.e. ...

Thanks so much to both of you! And agh I'm really sorry about the formatting, it wouldn't come out normal :(. But since "Easter" is a poem, I put quotes ...

Kay, no more critiques please.. I'm printing the essay out & I have to hand it in tomorrow anyway.. But thanks so much to everybody who helped me!

Ahh thank you Keiraaa! I'll correct that, thanks so much. I'll definitely PM you when I post an actual storyy. I would've posted a short fiction or something more interesting ...

Thanks so much to both of you.. I'm not too good at writing essays so I expected a lot more mistakes :P. I'll try my best to include everything you've ...

I'm not going to repeat any critiques, and I think everyone above me has covered it all.. So other than that, very very good.. I actually teared up a little ...

I could see it being a published teen fiction book, just keep working on it!