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jellybean

  • Lounge, The Re: The "I'm Back" Thread

    I'm back after more than a year. And wow, everything is so different! I like it. :)

    Jul 23, 2012
  • Writing Activities Re: Haiku Battle

    we used to wish on stars before we grew up, but now we can't find them.

    May 11, 2011
  • General Fiction Novels Re: Jonah In the Night- Chapter Three

    Darn it, everyone else got here before me. x) So, Lava and Grandison basically caught everything. The only other nitpick that I could find was that you use "white" a ...

    May 7, 2011
  • Writing Activities Re: Haiku Battle

    Souls are fragile things, a mix of wants and needs that skin will not protect.

    May 4, 2011
  • Other Poetry Re: Neuropsychosis

    So I really don't have any critiques for you. I absolutely loved this poem. It was....interesting (for a lack of better words). I thought your imagery was just mind-blowing. The ...

    May 1, 2011
  • General Fiction Novels Re: Lifewish: Prologue

    Hello! I thought your picture thingy was really pretty! I love the flower and the font. Which font did you use? So my main issue with this is that a ...

    May 1, 2011
  • Fantasy Novels Re: White Demons Prologue

    Okay, the reviewers before me pretty much mentioned everything. I did like the suspense you created here, however it was super, super short. This reminds me of something you'd read ...

    May 1, 2011
  • Writing Activities Re: Haiku Battle

    ^^ Heehee. Haters gonna hate. 8) She's a heart breaker alright and I don't think she has any duct tape.

    May 1, 2011
  • General Fiction Short Stories Re: Coffin Girl - Part 1

    Augh! No fair! You have to continue this! I really enjoyed this, but as Lava said, some of this got a little boring. I would've liked to see some ghostly ...

    May 1, 2011
  • Fantasy Novels Re: Last Angel chapter one

    Hello! I think the idea behind this is pretty cool but you need to work on a few things. First, this doesn't seem like a first chapter to me. It ...

    May 1, 2011
  • General Fiction Novels Re: Counting Breaths: Prologue

    Hello, I'm Jelly and I shall be your reviewer today. First of all, I thought this was a little too short. You also do a lot of telling instead of ...

    May 1, 2011
  • Fantasy Novels Re: Chapter 1 - The Memory Key

    For some reason, the beginning reminded me of the text you might see at the beginning of a movie that lets the viewer know what's going on. x) Ahem, anyway. ...

    May 1, 2011
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: Morbid Circus

    D: Creepy picture! Okay, I've never reviewed poetry before, so please bear with me. A smile smeared on my frowning face White powder covers my dark skin Inky gunk, so ...

    May 1, 2011
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: Trust

    I absolutely love haiku too. :) I wrote a bunch for National Poetry Month because I couldn't think of anything else to write. x) I think the correct name for ...

    May 1, 2011
  • General Fiction Novels Re: Always stick together Chapter 1

    When I first started reading this, I didn't think I would be able to get into it, but then I really started to enjoy it. You have a very powerful ...

    May 1, 2011


If you can't describe what you are doing as a process, you don't know what you're doing.
— W. Edwards Deming