jayleighsmith

Alright. This one is short. And I hate that. I refuse to shorten my chapters just to get more reviews. I'd rather just hear comments instead of nitpicky reviews, even ...

“Are you too dense to remember that I’m supposed to give you a tour?” Hmm. Although dense is a very good word, but I'm not sure if a thirteen year ...

Hello, I'm Jayleigh. Humans are curious beings. They are inquisitive, sensitive, rash. They think they are superior over all else, engrossed with themselves. They think they are powerful. They are ...

Very well done, Pink. I love the battle descriptions and movements. One thing I picked out, when Zack says, "I told you I was coming" you forgot the 'you' and ...

This was really well written. There were a few grammar mistakes, but I'm sure you can find them. Also. When writing dialog, the punctuation changes. "Hi," she said. She said, ...

(Is the pace too fast?) Seven Fawn emerged from the doors a few minutes later and stood above me. I glanced at her knee high leather boots and wondered when ...

Hello all! This is an idea that came to me. I am sure that unfortunately this happens quite often. I wanted to create a short, short story to attack this ...

Wow, you posted part three almost a year after one and two. Well, I see that even though you posted this almost a month ago, you are deprived of reviews. ...

(Okay, if you read this and are totally lost, that is because you haven't reread chapters four and five. They are completely different because I just did not like them. ...

Suddenly, the phone rang a pulled me out of my revere. I think there is a typo here. and? Anxiety rose inside of me, as I tried suppress the thought ...

My name is Sofia, I am thirteen years old and am in Eight grade, I live in a small country named Honduras, here at Honduras I am the daughter of ...

Okay Wall_flower, hello again. May I just point out that you should do about four reviews for every post. I saw that you were new and have posted these poems ...

Oh. Wow. I didn't read the first part, but the emotions pouring off of this part may cause me to. This was beautifully written. I don't mean to give you ...

Hello Wall_flower. I'm Jayleigh Its dark it's late, Okay, awesome first line in my opinion, however..." It's " and shouldn't there be a comma to symbolize a pause between dark ...

Hello, Mayasssi, I'm Jayleigh. Off I go... I am bored of you I still love you Wouldn't these two lines have quotes around them, because they were being said. don't ...