jayleighsmith

I suggest pressing the edit button and putting this into a paragraph format. No one can read this jumbled mess. (just a hint if you would like reviews) I'd gladly ...

Hey, Suzanne. Could you take a look at this for me? It is historical fiction and somewhat romantic as well. This is only the first chapter. Thanks so much, in ...

Hello, thanks for PMing me about it. I'll only review part four since all my comments for part three have been looked at. On we go. "Oh, and by the ...

and the explaining that is being done right now means the difference between This didn't exactly make sense to me, even after rereading it twice. Maybe try rewording. I already ...

Okay, we have a lot to cover in a short amount of time. -Tell me more of the room they are first in. I'd like to see longer paragraphs in ...

Personally, I think that this would sound a lot more dramatic if it was in the third person. What do you think? He eased the shiny bullet into the waiting ...

Alright, the hard part is over, now I just have to sit and wait. As I wait I examine my yard, for such a large yard there aren't many tree's, ...

Hello, Flower~Child. I have not read any of the previous reviews, so if there is repetition, just ignore. I am a little rusty with my reviewing, but I will do ...

Chapter Two The library was the only room in any house we had lived in that I was ever excited to enter. Physically, there were walls, a floor and a ...

Austenite, thank you so much for your review. You have no idea how much I just went, "oh crap" in my head while reading it. Everything you pointed out, I ...

Alright. Hello, Darkangel. I'm Jayleigh. I'm a bit rusty on reviewing and my style is unlike some others on here. First off, you're tenses scare me. Are we present? Are ...

I had been sitting in the bath for a better part of an hour. My mind could not wrap itself around the concept that my parents wanted to pay someone ...

Hello. I too have neglected YWS for a while now. But I am trying to make up for it. Well, off I go. most likely the most Repetition of 'most' ...

Hello. I am Jayleigh. I am here to criticize. And off I go... I was sat on the bench I was sitting? I sat? Pick one. with my best friend ...

The old woman stared at me. She squinted her eyes and pursed her thin lips. I never thought that I would be interrogated in the grocery store, but then again, ...