jasmine12

Hey Ash. I've got a question for you. Why can't Sophia and Carmen be together? If she's so gah-gah over him, and before, he said he was all gah-gah as ...

one any only nitpick In the last paragraph, you said "bite ME lip" when is should be my. Ash! Oh my god. this chapter was amazingly written. Kinda short for ...

Part Five-Do you know the muffin man? “Way to be slick,” Ms. Sullivan whispered to Rex. They were in their English class taking a test on chapter eleven of Huck ...

Hey, Jas here. No time for chit chat. On to the review... which would account for the shiver I had felt. I dont feel that this bit is really needed. ...

So, as many before me have stated, it is rather info dumpy. We don't need so much backround story just yet. Just go right into the action. Wait until she ...

Part Four-“I can’t take another conversation about the weather with you!” Ashlynn stalked through the hall on her way to her locker. Class had already begun but her alarm clock ...

Part Three edited-“What are you doing after detention?” Detention was quiet and packed with students. She didn’t even see Rex as she walked in and sat in the only available ...

Part Two edited- “Rawr,” says the historic dinosaur. Ashlynn couldn’t decide on what to wear to school the following day. She had trashed her entire closet, not that it was ...

Part One-Where for art thou, manners? The entire classroom erupted with chatter about last night’s American Idol winners. Ashlynn fell back in her seat behind a boy that had a ...

So, everyone before me has basically said what I would like to say. The horrific actions that the narrator must go through to feel as if revenge is the right ...

Hmm. I think this is very interesting. happened to me six months ago. Anyways. I think you did an amazing job at capturing the right emotions and descriptions needed. I ...

Hello. So I see you are rather new. My name is Jas and I will be your reviewer today. Some things I say may seem harsh but it is in ...

Banned for having no reason to be banned for!

Alright, Ash. Here as promised...and yes, if you were wondering, the room IS clean for once. Okay, enough about me...lets move on to this chapter. I was thinking of ways ...

I pulled myself up and leaned into towards the thing on the ground beside me. This sentence doesn't make much sence here. Maybe some rewording? I wasn’t too sure where ...