janice

First of all...does it go on? Or did you just end it there? Because if you did, that would be bad, and you most definitely need to add something. :P ...

Here is the whole paragraph. Could you please tell me how I can make it better? Do I need to use a semi colon or anything? Suddenly it all came ...

Thanks for your criticism everyone. I'm going to make some changes. Can someone help me with the grammar on this sentence?: "The pause of hesitation before the deafening collision, followed ...

on a side note, I know this is not as good as everyone elses on here, but I'd like some good criticism. Give me all you got. Thanks :)

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Right Janice, I have changed the colour. I never realised it came out so pink. Thanks for your comments not regarding the pink. I'm not really a fan of Good ...

Lose gothic settings and ancient vernacular. The Transcendentals drove that to death. The poem itself is too abstract, as well. Cemeteries and Ghosts and Souls and Eternities are all empty ...

May I please point out that this sounds like a Good Charlotte song that I am not terribly fond of...? I agree with the above post, pink... it burns! :shock: ...

Cemetery Heart Opening the gateway to buried mortality. A landscape of serenity, freedom from agony. Our despair and misery now remain deceased, Living souls awaiting death to bring us peace. ...

thanks! yeah you're right about that, i didn't notice, but from now on it's 'their' not 'its' Hey shouldn't it be "my" because you are talking about yourself flying? Janice

How long did this take to draw? :shock: .....

It looks like a dragon falling on top of a very stoned alien.

Petrified. Those lids refuse to close Perhaps, they will cease to open once more? One small thing, you contradict "refuse to close" with the phrase"cease to open". If possible, could ...

Apologies for correcting the spelling and grammar on my last reply, since somebody had already done so. Janice

Just a few grammar/spelling corrections here :shock: The tinted blue window held his reflection on the oppisite side of the glass, opposed to the countless back stabbers on the other ...