jan_o9

hello..this is a very interesting story..i love the forest part and the diamond thing the was the most vivid scene for me..the background on the war is also good.. i'm ...

hello..i find this a nice start..i like how you have established the characters' personalities..just some stuffs i noticed.. The sun didn’t bother her so much anymore, though her long sleeved ...

nice story premise..but don't you think your chapters are a little too short?..maybe try elaborating the events more..the descriptions of the characters and the still seems vague to me..and the ...

hello..i'm not an expert..but i noticed some minor typos and some punctuation errors just like these ones..try considering these points..but these are just my thoughts okay.. "When we were laughing ...