jan_o9

hello..this is a very interesting story..i love the forest part and the diamond thing the was the most vivid scene for me..the background on the war is also good.. i'm ...

my chapter 2..i've introduced some of the other main characters here..please feel free to critique..thanks :) CHAPTER II THE INFILTRATORS The room was unusually dark and there she was, sitting ...

hello..i find this a nice start..i like how you have established the characters' personalities..just some stuffs i noticed.. The sun didn’t bother her so much anymore, though her long sleeved ...

thanks zannashepherd..your corrections helped a lot..i'll be re editing this one to fix the tenses..thanks again..:)

thanks for the corrections..i agree this has a lot of editing to be done..on the adoptive part..i meant it was she who was adopted..thanks for the encouragement as well..:)

hi everyone..this is my very first post here..and this is also the very first novel i'm working on..please feel free to comment and critique..any corrections and suggestions are definitely welcome..i ...

nice story premise..but don't you think your chapters are a little too short?..maybe try elaborating the events more..the descriptions of the characters and the still seems vague to me..and the ...

hello..i'm not an expert..but i noticed some minor typos and some punctuation errors just like these ones..try considering these points..but these are just my thoughts okay.. "When we were laughing ...