jake457

I have to rate everything 18 because of 'profanitive' text that may arouse.

Ah maybe, but the way I composed this piece vocally is hard to place down in the text. There's certian emotional levels in each verse with different rythmically schemes, it ...

I can’t sleep, I can’t fight Won’t make the night I lay awake, heart to break I hold the tears I hold the hate Oooh ooh Chorus Woah diamond- Where ...

Well, I feel the dashes weren't a problem, they added to the flow and how it went along. To truly analyse lyrics you must sing it or it to be ...

As a singer (slight brag) I really enjoyed singing this song, it has a soul and purpose. I believe the best lyrics is from you're emotions and this is nothing ...

First review! Right lets get down to the business. Beautiful and deep, it has this charm and hope but at the same time reflects distress and desperation. For grammer? I ...

thanks guys :), and telle, im planning to write a song with my friend sometime if that sounds good, but I used to be in a band and we almost ...

Well if you read my other piece 'gimme what I want', then this will hint on what happened after that song. Alot did happen and I put into song format ...

Thanks! I was trying to get the empathic/imagery to the song, the chorus had alot of tweaking so it means alot :) Also, just change the formatting, any better?

This a kind of old song but I think it has some good to it. (bass and drums) we all, sit here on our, own now make it, feel like ...

Hey, this is a draft at the moment, need more inspiration to finish and tweak it. But it seems good for a rough copy. Have a look, review, love,hate or ...

I love the whole contrast from loved up at the beginning to the just plain sick of the guy at the end. It's not usually what I see in lyrics ...

I like, it's very catchy as promise and quite amusing. It reminds me of some british bands like, King blues or Lily Allen but I reckon you should add more! ...

Oh, I was more taking it as a depechmode tint with a more emotional rock to it :L but if it can be done as a rap, it might come ...

Omg, I keep forgetting the puncuation but then look under my name to the lest hand side. And don't worry, it's a rap attempt, everything else I do isn't rap, ...