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I really think the story has potential. I think you may need to work on using a tad more details and really help us realize your character's situation. Really try ...

This is part of the the first chapter from a book I am writing about packs of wolves living in the forest. I will not be posting all of it ...

I really enjoyed it! The novel really does have a great plot and I think your writing is great. I know a lot of people like this story already and ...

Alrighty! Thank You Very Much! :smt001

: ) Thanks For The Review And Advice! I Will work on that! :D Thanks

Note: This Is Not The Complete Chapter One. The Rest Will Be Posted later

If I had a heart, it should have stopped beating along time ago. It didn't. I got to my feet and kept walking like nothing had happened.Thunder clapped in the ...

Thank You! :smt001

Sam And The Worlds: The Apocalypse Prolouge "The apocalypse is coming, and if they die, we die." Alex stared into the sky as if asking it a question and waiting ...

Thank You! And yes, I will definatly keep writing! :D

Tabatha: " Run away, And if they try to catch me... impossible. I have super speed you know" Shay: " Depends on who's locker it is." Declan: " I would ...

Yes, thank you very much. This isn't all of Chapter One. And yes, Belle is, Ashley, the girl who is telling the story's sister. Thank you much! -Jessica

I really like your writing style, simple yet descriptive when nessesary. The chapter was great though slightly short. I hope to hear more about the girl and her sister in ...

I really enjoyed reading it and when I finished it, I wanted more! It was exciting and gripping. It left me hungry for more! Write On! :D

I liked it a lot, It was totally new and exciting. Disturbing in a fun and clever way. Lovely detail and descriptions. You're a wonderful author! It's a great story! ...