jDawn

Hey! I thought this was really nice, and beautiful. All i can suggest is to watch out for run-on sentences. Don't get carried away with commas and stuff. It becomes ...

Wow, I wanna cry. Maybe not so much cause of the story but because of your friend and her sister. they'll be in my prayers. Really cool story too, Teardrop. ...

This rocks my socks off! I just have one thing to say, it starts off saying "Here's a story, of a pair of Uglies..." and then it goes into the ...

Okay, first of all, I suggest titling this like so: Novel Title Here Chapter One or Novel Title Here Prologue or Novel Title Here Exerpt. Also, if you space this ...

Hi! Jessica here! Okay, first of all, as you said this is very short. I suggest going threw and adding lenth to this. It needs depth and feelings from both ...

Hi! : D Here to review. First of all, I started crying when I read this. So far, Dakota's story is really sad and unfortunate. It makes me think of ...

Okay, finished Jash!

Hi, Jessica here. Sorry it took me a while to get to review this :smt003 Grammar/Spelling I didn't find much, maybe one of two minors that I think my fellow ...

Okay, thanks!

I got almost everybody finished, i'll try and get Roal's done a.s.a.p.

Hi! Jessica here for my review! First of all, I think everybody covered most of the nitpicks. : ) I think this is actually very interesting. You use a lot ...

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