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Vashi "Vashi?" Was it my turn already? "There is nothing that you'd want to know about me." "Are you sure about that." The man spoke up. "Unless of course you ...

Dear Beloved One, I will start with a beginning. Once, in a time lost to you and perhaps soon to me, there was the Creation. Now, this Creation was not ...

This is really great and definitely worth continuing. It keeps the reader guessing and brings up plenty of things for later plot points, which is exactly what a prologue should ...

Vashi So was the savior-man bored then? Well, his boredom was his own problem. The man would need to learn how to live inside his head. My smile broke into ...

Annie She felt like Dorothy from the Wizard of Oz. Still dazed, she tried to remember what had just happened. There had been a flash of brilliance, followed by some ...

Name: Akeres (male) What age they look like: 20ish Appearance: Long wavy red hair, your traditional Greek garb...Just imagine Ronald Weasley with long hair in a Zeus costume. What they ...

Vashi So they had come back. I could feel the tight-stretched tension between the little group. What had happened then? Certainly their group was more agreeable than the company I ...

Vashi I woke up with a feeling of absolute lightness. Something had assuaged my pain and now I felt like I could stand up and dance around the world. What ...

America blew up? This will be fun. :) Name: Annie (Anastasia) Ribaldo Age: 13 Gender: Female Personality: Annie is your archetypal little sister. She's naive though not exactly innocent, speaks ...

I love the emotion you conveyed in this. You had me in suspense and I feel it moved along at just the right pace, making it very real. :) Sometimes ...

Vashi Voices droned on as they talked of what they could do. Swimming, exploring, leaving. I would like very much to do all three of those. Most immediately the swimming ...

Vashi A person stirred next to me, and I felt the steam of fresh-cooked fish close to my skin. It was slightly charred, and I felt queasy at the thought ...

Vashi "...dead". My body froze when he said that. Dead? Who? And who was this male touching me? He had seemed decent, but for whatever reason, males always made me ...

Hey guys, thanks for the critiques. I wasn't actually trying to rhyme. I'm not sure where exactly you guys see the rhymes, but if all of you think so, I ...

It's good that I can see what you're trying to convey, and I think the repetition serves well to show your determination. However, you might want not want to use ...