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Earthly Competition The words ran through Arianna's mind ...now comes the story of Nine-fingered... "Ms. Casey, Ms. Casey!" Arianna disconnected her mind from the downloaded book. "We have arrived Ms.

This shows skilled writing, but it makes no sense. What is with the train? What is with this counting cat-woman? Readers have no idea what you are talking about in ...

This is good. It is a very good metaphor. Although I don't know about suffocating. Empty seems a little more accurate. But, good writing and powerful imagery, especially "felt the ...

I don't really like it. The quirkiness you are going for doesn't seem real. The flow of the poem seems manufactured. It is contrived and confusing. It seems like you ...

This isn't very good. I don't feel that all of these relate to lies. It seems like you are forcing imagery that doesn't really work with your topic.

I like it. It is a silly poem that actually rings completely true. We all love M&M's. I like the rhyming. It almost never seems forced. Except for rhyming wide ...

Golden Day Black Night Black night will make him pay It will surely give him fright Golden Day Black Night Under bright sky The boy flies a kite Under dark ...

"Captain, sir, we seem to have a problem in Belt XYL in the Kelloggs galaxy." Captain Coogle sighed and looked up at his 21 year old nervous attendant. "What," Coogle ...

These books are amazing. The creativity and breadth of the story is wonderful, and his themes are powerful and important. Pullman's writing style is excellent as well.

This is very good. You capture the mind of your character very well, and believably. The wandering of his mind is how people really think. At times your description seems ...

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