innerbeauty555

Wow. Awesome. Hilarious. What else can I say? Go, TI-89! Poem of the week! :-) -*-*--Diana--*-*-

Meh. I didn't like it. First of all, yes, it is good to use punctuation, but that's a personal choice. Second, why do you feel like a bird, mouse, etc.? ...

This was way too broken up. You can't have a period at the end of every line. Change some of them to commas. It's too hard to read a poem ...

I agree this should be in the "Lyrics" forum. Check out the rules for the "Lyrics Poetry" forum. They specifically said NOT to put songs here. On another note (ha ...

When they said, I couldn't control my feelings, I said, "Watch me." I'm still going at it, Yes, even today. I still have such self-control, Such incredible self-discipline, It makes ...

I disagree about the rhyming. I didn't think it sounded forced at all. It seemed to flow to me. This is a well-written poem. Capitalize "i" in the first line! ...

Um, no. This kind of stunk. Like TBR said, it was old-English style, but it wasn't the right kind of old English. It needs A LOT of work. There are ...

I've always liked the idea behind this poem, Alyssa, because I know exactly what you're talking about. Thinking about it and reading it again, though, I am seeing that the ...

Hey, this was OK. I believe you meant "aching" in the last line of the first stanza and "painful" in the third line of the second stanza. I think you ...

I can relate to this really well, and apparently, I'm not alone. I agree with everyone else in that your old work was more classically poetic, and that now it's ...

I have no novel to edit at the moment, but there's a group on called MarNoWriMo, which is basically NaNoWriMo, except it's in March. I don't have a novel to ...

Excellent use of metaphor and imagery. I really like it. It really describes the idea of giving someone your trust well. You don't need the random capitals in the middle ...

This was very good. It was very descriptive, and yes, I agree it was sad. It probably flows better with the music. Well done. :-) -*-*--Diana--*-*-

By the way, the "sane" part is kind of an inside joke. See, I consider myself insane, so when I'm not feeling like myself, I say I'm sane. :-D Oh, ...

Bloodshot eyes cracking open, From severe lack of sleep, I cannot think for the life of me, And I may be in too deep. How I'm staying awake to write ...