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Tiresome alliteration, meaningless names, and redundant repetition... You asked for it. :p For those reasons alone I'd suggest going back to the drawing board, so to speak. It's good that ...

Over- -Head This poem was intelligently rhythmic and had an oracular but human voice. The surreal imagery is the emotional underscore for me when I read it. One thing I ...

Hey, dante. First I want to address some technical stuff. Your style is inconsistent. At parts you capitalize the first letter of a line, and at other parts you don't. ...

Hello mello! I enjoyed reading your poem because the pacing was just as if dog-walking and your descriptions were clear and transposing. I think some editing is in order, trim ...

I started a French course this year but I'm not competent enough to give you a review worthy of the name. I would suggest dropping a link in the French ...

Unbroken sorrow swan-scattered in a dice-throw— you outlive yourself.

Edited The air is a billowing thicket of acrylic heat, since no AC saves four-dollar-gasoline for jaydrivers in the zenith of their days, those days when driving left feels right— ...

Awesome, can't wait for next week. *follows*

bumped so you might get another review :) On the swings kicking higher and higher, gazelle legs running into the sun and surf This image is fantastic. The lines' rhythm ...

Not sure I'm grasping the winter's night simile, but overall this is a charming poem. I'll come back for more, perhaps. :)

Lumi is probably right, so for now I'm only reviewing the first poem. I may come back to tackle the second though! :) Opening couplet and following two lines are ...

Hello, Lumi! :) This is great here. First stanza is fantastic. Overall you've achieved some excellent imagery, tone, and voice. I get that this is a letter addressed to someone. ...

Jasmine perfumes the woolly foreboding which waxes o'er the balcony, rails, lawn chairs, trails of suburban-blue and me and you. The moon marbles and bobs like yolk in the milky ...

Good Evening, Apple Core! :p The introduction was very well done. But why would a genius problem-solver not just invent a coffee maker for home? I get that you're saying ...

A screenshot would have been more appropriate. Considering the questionable nature of this, I'm not sure if I should believe that's an accurate quote. Not to mention these complaints should ...