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Dark light, the voices hear me, my friend’s – they despise me. I want to get high, Have to get high, Need to taste the sweetness. Light dark, I am ...

banned for having a siggy that makes sense lol

I absolutely agree with Casey :D

There is a beautiful aura about a girl you love- it doesn’t matter if she’s a bitch. I feel - when I look down at the text and all I ...

Yeh I see the lack of description but I was aiming to bring emotion and the scene across via dialogue. I left the description out on purpose. Also, the F-word...I ...

It's a personal opinion. I don't think we can say it's it's a hard right or wrong. There has to be a certain time that is murder, because clearly the ...

The whole idea of being a christian is 'abstaining from all evil of the world', being like Jesus, obeying Him, etc. Also, without the bible Christianity is nothing. Where would ...

*I watched a TV show which followed a similiar story line and I wanted to re-construct it* ‘You cheating bitch!’ The empty car park echoed my words, and rolled them ...

...I wouldn't call this poetry. But I can see the idea your trying to bring across. Why are high school students [s]are [/s]crazy? Are they picking on a nerd or ...

This was good. :) He wiped the sweat from his brow, and walked over to the police tape. He flashed his badge, and the officer at the tape let him ...

Lol, oh Vernon.... I don't believe poetry needs a cold hard structure, but I believe it needs to flow. It if doesn't have that, then it's just a paragragh or ...

Selenasacuna, This is a great improvement. :) You have really worked on the imagery. Now for your actual storyline. Y ou could tell it was older, almost a black color. ...

Hey Vernon :) Ok, I'll do my best. Firstly, at a glance, there is too much punctuation. Reading this, it feels choppy. Uneven. Forced even... This may sound weird, but ...

Hey guy13, this is just a future reference for dialogue punctuation for your future stories. :) Keep writing and best of luck. I've kept everything the same except spelling, grammatical ...

For example, if you see a straight couple holding hands in public, no one would think anything of it, but if a gay couple does it then they're 'flaunting' it. ...