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Very nice :) I really felt this poem. I think the ending works. The last few stanzas lead up to a slight glimmer of hope and I think that's enough ...

Hey :) Welcome to YWS. Ok, now for a crit. This is quite unique. Why? Why must everyone hate me because I'm free? Or is it they hate me because ...

Hey :) Your poetry always has so much feeling in it. That's goood. lol. But I think you have to work on the flow a bit. Also try giving less ...

10/10 Love it haha.

Thanks for the crit Alainna :)

I'm addicted too. :)

I'm so sorry. I'm glad he doesn't rule your life anymore. And your confession was just wow. You have courage to put this down on paper and out into the ...

No worries :) I want to read the next bit lol.

*I am experimenting with everything, and in this letter I was trying to get emotion without too much fluff, as well as getting the point across strongly* Dear Lover, My ...

Hey :) First off, I understand this is a work in progress, so I'll crit as if just doing another re-edit. I started it but the wordiness hit me. Too ...

banned for for being hop-less lol.

These doldrums my mind floats me on, Fragmented vision, Suppressed sigh, Tired lie… These scatter midst the waters of my heart, To only listen! To only try, To only die… ...

Adobe Fireworks..the Adobe web graphics designer. It's the top of the market, I'm just really bad at it, lol.

I drew the silhouette by tracing around a photo. :) Glad you like, Inky

*slightly revised version - originally posted under a different username just in case you recognize it* This world needs a synchronizer, an equalizer, Something adding the minuses, adding the finances