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Hey :) Welcome to YWS. Everyone is wicked excited to be here, lol. PM me anytime for a critique or chat. :) Peace, Inky

Hey :) Welcome to YWS. I think I mentioned the 2 review rule in my review of your poem. :) But otherwise, if you have any problem or need to ...

Hey welcome to YWS. I'm sure your not a loser by the way. And it was a fine introduction. I'd like to see some of your poetry. :) Feel free ...

9/10 Scarily, it is so true. :)

6/10. It reminds me of The Last Mohican for some reason. :) But I like black and white.

...wow. I know how this feels and this was so moving. It moved me. I didn't see anything to fix, this was really good. Damn, now I feel like crying.

Thanks for that :) I think he does talk like that now that you mention it. It'll will be easier to relate with the next chapter.

9/10 Very true. but the colours hurt my eyes a bit. Other wise it would be a ten :D lol you should make another one that's easier to read, coz ...

Hey :) Welcome to YWS. Just one thing - it's in the rule book that new members review two other posts bfeore posting their own work. :) It keeps the ...

Hmm. The first line 'The sky is raining' is about the only line I like. The last line ruined it. 'Best friends. Forever' I found myself saying, 'Please end it ...

“Hey, Alana, you feel the heat when he walked in?” My brother laughed and crossed over to the couch, slamming his can of rum down on the surface of the ...

Hey Hmm. Falling. Pleading. You must stay. I need you. Forever and a day. Yuk. You have used cliche after cliche in the first stanza. Cliches are bad . Stay ...

Lol. 8/10 It's cool and colourful. :)

7/10 Green...Lol. It's kinda cute.

8/10 It's true about the ballerina thing haha. But I wanted to be a jet-pilot. XD