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Re: Blue Oceans (1 of 2)
Wow, I really liked this! It was a lot darker than most of your work, but it felt more personal and deep. It gave me shivers at the end. It ...
Sat Jul 23, 2011 2:33 am -
Re: The Curb DT
Do you still need a character who steals things?
Sun Jun 12, 2011 2:14 am -
Re: At Cambridge.
Hey there :) I really liked this poem. It's simple tone fits it perfectly, and I like how it feels almost like a letter. There was only one small error ...
Sun Jun 12, 2011 1:18 am -
Re: Frogskin
i'm not afraid of frogskin- my childhood hands clasped more cold, sticky-toed frogs than my adolescent fingers brushed the minds of boys. i would listen for hours hoping the wind ...
Sun Jun 12, 2011 12:53 am -
Re: What Do You Admire?
I really liked the beginning of this poem, but I think that it faded a bit at the end. The first line really drew me in, and I wanted to ...
Sat Jun 11, 2011 6:15 pm -
Re: Why Friend Fell
Hey there, I really liked this poem. I think that it's my favorite of yours so far, at least out of the ones that I've seen. It flowed really nicely, ...
Sat Jun 11, 2011 3:23 am -
Re: The Lakeside Pact
Hey there :) I liked this, and I think that you should continue it. The storyline seems origional and interesting. There are just a few things that you could work ...
Sat Apr 23, 2011 4:49 pm -
Re: Mark Your Calendars: July 11th is Radio Day
Hooray for Indie Rock! xD
Sat Jul 03, 2010 7:46 pm -
Re: The Perkins Family
Hey there, Poem here. Okay, I just read the whole thing, and it's a little bit like a huge info dump. Obviously, these are all interesting people and they all ...
Sat Jun 12, 2010 5:21 pm -
Re: Auschwitz: Work Makes You Free
This is an essay I did for school. I know it needs a lot of work. I appreciate all reviews. :) Auschwitz: Work Makes You Free In 1940, the small ...
Mon Apr 12, 2010 5:56 am -
Re: An Attempt at Insanity- Poem's NaPo Thread
Lets see if I can get farther than last year!XD Critiques are much appreciated. April 1st, Untitled Silence fills the empty cracks of lives lived in solitude. Hidden under rocks ...
Sat Apr 03, 2010 4:10 am -
Re: inspire me
Hey there, I'm Poem. Welcome to YWS! :) I liked this poem, but it was rather short. Maybe you could try adding some length to it, perhaps an example of ...
Sat Apr 03, 2010 12:57 am -
Re: Villain Clichés to Avoid
I just realized that I don't have villain. 0.o
Mon Mar 15, 2010 12:23 am -
Re: The Giver Epilogue
Hello, I liked this! I have to say that my first line is my favourite, (The first line that was written by you). The only thing that struck me as ...
Fri Feb 26, 2010 2:23 am -
Re: Camp Half-Blood
Hey, I think Dara and Ama could be good friends if you want. Ama, Daughter of Hestia~ I look up from my book, and listen to the quiet noises of ...
Fri Feb 26, 2010 1:13 am
