icebender28

I thought you did great! Great job personafication-izing the sun. I tdid get a little confusing near the end, but i still thought it was cute, and very rythmetic.

Aritha: I listened intently to the gryphon's and grim reaper's conversation. Was he dumb? Or maybe he was just playing it for the gryphon. I thought I had made it ...

I loved it! It was so cute how you kind of wrote it from Gump a Goo's point of veiw. I think it was really adorable!

I thought you did great! The first couple of paragraphs were okay, but then you worked on characterizing them and the last few bits got me hooked for more. Please ...

“Callie?” Callie slowly opened her eyes to see Grey staring at her. “The princess finally awakens. Get up, it’s time to go beat some people up.” He laughed at his ...

This is really good! I love how you wrote it and showed the charaters feelings. He has no more than a month to live and it pains me deeply that ...

Tess: I had been walking for a long time when I broke into a clearing, Jared and Elise standing together to one side. "Hey guys!" I said, not very enthustiastic. ...

Aritha: The lizard flew above me, and dropped Itaeo next to me. "Well, I'm glad some of you aren't idiots." I said without stopping. "I only came because I think ...

Tess: i stood up and began walking. I thought we were going to wait here for everybody else. Nyx said. "We were, but they aren't coming back here. They're heading ...

Aritha: "What a stupid know-it-all." I said, talking about Kyler. "You know what, you can look South if you want, but I'm heading West. I've got a lead on where ...

Aritha: "Fine. Leave." I said. "I can handle this lizard " I emphasized 'lizard' and watched in amusement as his face twisted in anger. This guy didn't scare me. So ...

Jared: The other rogue stopped. Amy said. "How close?" Amy motioned her head down, and I looked to see a beautiful girl, with an owl Pet, some four feet below ...

Aritha: Stood at the edge of the clearing, wondering if anybody would notice me if I just left. I didn't feel like talking about the Mirror. It made me become ...

Aritha: Great. They found me. I thought as I climbed down from the tree. "Okay, so who are you?" The grim reaper asked. "What's it to you? I was just ...

Jared: Amy walked into the room of my little cottage. A rogue is coming. she said. "Really?" I said aloud. "Which way?" From the north. She's at the bottom of ...