icebender28

Tess: I walked up to Davnick and touched his hands. they froze over. It still didn't make me feel better, so i did it two more times. nope, not helping. ...

i think it's a great idea, writing from the point of veiw of the flyer. very enchanting, and nice description, I just thought you repeated things to many times and ...

"Please say I didn't do that." I whispered. everyone was silent. I closed my eyes in despair. it had happened again. Almost happened again. Great. Now they knew what was ...

(Shadow, I think that was awesome!) The Voice: I bursted awake and came face to face with the grim reaper boy. He looked shocked that i had awoken. I smiled ...

Ah man! I had let a small smug smile loose and Felicia had seen it. Great. Now I had to tell. My fun was over. I stepped out from my ...

These people weren't very smart, were they? They were so dumb, they didn't even know where they were! Then again, I didn't know where we were. Somewhere near the royal ...

Jared: I Hoped that Darren would be alright as I walked over to the boy rogue. "Who are you, and why were you fighting that girl?" I ask menacingly. I ...

Tess: The idiot rogue slashed Darren. Everlee looked so angry, it was hard to comprehend. But I knew, that now she was mad and didn't want to talk with them. ...

Jared: great, more rogues. And in a death match, too. Luckily they hadn't noticed us yet. They seemed very angry at each other, and both of them seemed very...disturbed. i ...

Hey, can I enter your characters in? I mean Razzle and Bee. Like, I sense you guys fighting, or something? If not tell me!

Aritha: Interesting. That's the only word I could say for this girl. She had definitly seen the mirror, and yet she seemed to be fighting it off, and succeding. But ...

Aritha: We were all silent. It was true the choices he gave us. I had a sudden realization why we were so against each other. Hello, we were a whole ...

Aritha: Man, all these new people were giving me serious whiplash. The halfling was really freaking me out. Especailly since the bag he was holding was emanating dark magic like ...

It is so cute! I loved how you made the reader understand what was happening, without saying it outright, so that it seemed more from the child's point of veiw. ...

Jared: We had been setting up for the Rings for only an hour or so, and I had been growing progressivly more and more anxious, and stupid. But then again ...