iBel29

hey I am new some members directed me here, everyone seems friendly and I am already enjoying myself here, oh merry xmas everyone :) :)

well I like it though, I was curious what the man would wish for, but i wish for you to continue it, because now I am curious why the Spirit ...

I liked the beginning with the fly it is a very interesting dialogue to read. I loved it

It was a bit too fast for what was happening. But i love the beginning of it, it is such a catch. You explain quite well, but try to make ...

love came as taciturm as the creep of the shadow of sunset. if the sky painted of devoured desire with what notion, and intent can one describe this timeless beauty? ...

And that is when the best work sometimes come in, maybe romance is my weakness but the beginning was true and excellent, it does say not convey it in a ...

first thing i noticed is the misspelling of dinner. But d@ydre@mer27 has covered the most important point. “ she remembered me of my mother ” replace remember with reminded. Don’t ...

First thing try not to be plain with the language, I see you are trying to give back-history, but I think you should give glimpses of them through perhaps showing ...

I could not understand bits of it, but some lines are quite interesting though, it’s like I can grab the concept but then you keep losing me. But anyway the ...

My name is iBel29, I am currently staying in Botswana and I am looking forward to what this sight has to offer, so far I have read great stuff. I ...

1 Objects are humans too, their population mottled around the world, their gender just as confusing as the French language, I never understood why each word had a gender. My ...

Honestly can you just get published, because this truly sounds like a novel in a shop. I like how descriptive it is when she talks, I actually like the Lady ...

I read your last poem, regret, and loved it so I decided to check the rest, this next one particularly caught me at the last lines. I am a sucker ...

This is good, but the second paragraph ruined the flow of this poem, it feels as if you seem unsure where to break it especially the first line ‘ Bound ...

I think the general atmosphere you are setting is good, that is the general plot, but try not to be cliché with the language, making it seem dread. Put emphasis ...