hummingbird

I enjoyed the new characters you introduced. It adds to the intrigue. The last paragraph confused me a little, if the warriors can not fight without prayer then why can ...

This story just keeps getting better and better. you have talent. I agree with Bear that there should be more description of the demons. i think you can still do ...

Wow, I loved this poem, I too have a sister and I could not have put it any better. She is blessed to have you. Hummingbird

I am sad this is the last chapter for me to read right now, please let me know when you post your next chapter. I loved the scene in this ...

You are adding more characters and making this even more exciting. I liked seeing Aaron trying to figure out the relationship between Christian and Seth. You are really making his ...

Kim I like the way you described Aaron and the war angels at the beginning of the chapter. It makes me wonder, what is going to happen and holds my ...

OK! WOW, WOW and more WOW. The fight between Hate and Seth was absolutely amazing. The way you described it made me feel like I was there and rooting Seth ...

This chapter really held my attention. I am not sure where you are going with this, but I am anxious to keep reading. I am drawn to Aaaron's character, you ...

A friend told me to check this story out. WOW what an interesting story, I look forward to reading the rest of the chapters, I can see it has alaready ...

This story I can see will continue to draw readers, you have a talent and I enjoyed reading it. I do need to say that you had 3 different names ...

I really liked this chapter, the way you introduced the bear into the picture really made it exciting as well as funny. Keep up the great work, I look forward ...

I really liked this story, it is funny and easy to read. Your doing a great job, keep it up. Hummingbird

I am really impressed that this is your first story, you have a way of describing things that make me feel I am there. I could tell you of your ...

Wow, your story is written with so much thought. It truly does keep the reader wanting more. I am looking forward to chapter 6. Hummingbird

Kim I can honestly say that your story kept me wanting to read more. You are doing very well. My advice would be to avoid the extra had, that, have ...