housecat

So... This is true, right? I like it, but I want to know more. I want to know why this girl is sweet, what she looks like, what is her ...

Like everybody said, a couple of grammar issues. Capitalize your i's. You also need to add punctuation in some parts where they're talking. It seems like a good start, but ...

I think this sounded pretty good, there really isn't anything that I think needs to be changed. Some people are mentioning that the flow is a little iffy in some ...

Hm, it's a very good start. I think that the 'game of life' would be hiding those things, more than anything. We all have very similar knowledge and feelings, yet ...

The last line was pretty amazing. This is very simple, but I like it the way it is.

I don't know about you, but I almost always write the title last. I write more music than poetry, so I usually just use my favorite line ( short, of ...

I also see writing as an art form, but I do agree with what you just said. I can't just feel 'sad' because he's sad. I have to know why ...

I really like this poem and you most defiantly have a knack for writing. You gave us a good amount of imagery and I could sense some of the emotions. ...

You honestly should write poetry more often! I think that this was pretty creative and actually very interesting to read. You used the right amount of imagery and I could ...

These are actually pretty good, and I like how you actually mentioned some of the instruments to give us a better idea of how it might sound. The one thing ...

Stronger than a hurricane, Our teenage angst Brings us pain. It's Raging within us . No one understands . No one cares . Where they see no problems , They ...

Some of my best pieces were written in the middle of the night! I overall liked the whole idea, but it could defiantly be better. The poem seems very simple. ...

Fake has only a fraction of Real. That part of Fake isn't easy to feel. Its lies dance off the Maker's lips. And real once was water, But now She's ...

This is very confusing. There were a lot of grammar mistakes, but everybody already seemed to mention that. Before you post, you really need to use your best grammar, so ...

Aha, your poetry again. I like how honest it is, we can really see inside your head. I do agree that it doesn't really have a flow. You don't HAVE ...