housecat

Every day, I wake up feeling older. I sit up, sleep molding in with caution. Before I am completely aware and alert, Honesty jolts through my body. Only one second ...

Rhymes are very pretty, but also very distracting. These rhymes seem very forced. I think some of the comparisons could be better. This is a common topic, and you need ...

Overall, I can say that this was very well written, and that you are very talented! One thing that does bother me though is the rhymes. They don't seem forced, ...

It's a good idea overall, but very unrealistic. For starters, I don't think anybody who knows that they're going to get into Harvard is just going to blow that opportunity ...

As people said, great imagery! The thing is, I had to read it a couple of times before I could really understand it. Sparkles blind as they reflect off the ...

There is an atheist in my class who once said " You're probably a Christian or Catholic, right?" It obviously made me laugh because I don't understand why he thought ...

I really loved this and there was some amazing imagery here. I like how it focused on race, sexuality, age, and gender. The whole purpose was amazing. It wouldn't surprise ...

Pretty, but very empty. It's lacking something. I would say a storyline. Although it's random, I think you should keep working on it! I got into it very quickly. The ...

I loved it. So much. I just wanted to tell you that. I don't think that there is anything wrong with this poem. please continue writing!

I love the way when you laugh You're entire face lights up. This line just made me fall in love with the poem. Throughout my life, there has been two ...

Discomfort. Something underestimated. It's one million problems, simplified into one word. One day, you're alive. You inhale your first breath of air. Somewhere in your subconscious, the symptoms are

Wow, I really love these! They are so creative and entertaining. I agree with misstoria and Gratziella, it would make a very funny TV show. At first I was bothered ...

Somewhat... confusing. But I really liked it. I'm wondering what the end means? That's mainly what confuses me. I know the ghosts name is Grant, but I'm still lost. Maybe ...

So you seem like a very good writer, with A LOT of potential, but you defiantly need practice. Which isn't a bad thing. There's no such thing as a 'perfect ...

So, the whole idea of this is has potential, and I overall like it, but the rhymes seems a little too forced. Rhymes can often make a poem flow better, ...