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heya! i'm glad you pointed out the overuse of adjectives, i used a grotesquely large number (hurr). i'll have to reign myself in a bit in the future. and yeah, ...

hey man, thanks for the review. of all the things i considered for this story, the appearance of Jacob for some reason wasn't one of them. i'll add it to ...

gunna is spelled gonna? wow even my auto spellcheck on my phone agrees with you. i had no idea lol. my problem with word repetition is one of editing, it ...

this is why i submit here, i love when people point out weaknesses so i can make the story stronger. thanks so much for your ideas and thanks again for ...

okay i understand now. the dialogue between Arthur and his dad should have suspended the reader in a feeling of security, which makes the lion attack more surprising. is that ...

yea that would have been a good place to end it, but unfortunately Arthur couldn't write the events down as they happened to him so i had to go further, ...

i think one of the reasons the dialogue exchanges are kind of glossed over is because story is narrated by the MC in a recollection of events, and i figured ...

that's something that no one has ever pointed out before, but now that you have, it gives me pause. you're right, in a lot of my stories i struggle for ...

yeah someone else corrected me on period placement, this is an old story and i didn't correct it. you see the MC as flawed? that's an interesting interpretation, i was ...

gah, i can't believe i switched perspectives! thank you for pointing it out and everything else. you're a great reviewer and i'm very glad you like this. i can't wait ...

i wanted to continue this story anyway, so okay ^-^. feels good to get such a positive response on this.

wow, thanks much! i'm so glad i was able to convey this story successfully. it always kills me when people start pointing out my grammar mistakes because i proofread and ...

hey, thanks for the kind comments. glad you enjoyed it.

well i'm just speaking my mind, and i'm glad you feel that way about my feedback. anything i can do to keep you writing, i'll do it. i think you ...

there's really no taking it too far with me - any subject is fair game, as long as you treat it with respect and take it seriously, which you do ...