horrendous

maybe you're not qualified to make that determination?

banned for reasons that will soon become a mystery, even to myself

horrendous

Better. I personally think you're trying too hard to make this feel "epic", and still have too much distance between protagonist and reader. But that's me. I'm wondering why you ...

so what i'm gathering is, detail can be good, but characters shouldn't take a back seat to the fight. continue character development as the fight progresses. lemme try again: His ...

whenever someone describes to me a book i haven't read, or a show i haven't seen, they invariably emphasize characters and only briefly touch on the plot. that tells me ...

hey everyone. i've decided to continue a story i've been working on and there's going to be numerous instances of close quarters combat involving hand-to-hand and hand weapons such as ...

i saw that review when i was reviewing Moral Zero Part II, and was going to jump in to defend you, but Snoink had already commented and i felt it'd ...

Holy smokes I'm old..... I'm a Geriatric YWSer XD Representing 1990! '90 here too. you and i rule over these milk drinkers.

Are you overweight? Have you ever thought "I want to lose this excess body fat, but I don't want to be inconvenienced with not eating as much or moving". Well ...

Mwhahahhaha! You aren't the newest member anymore. :twisted: Welcome! :D The novelty was great while it lasted. Thanks!

HIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIII! I TYPE IN CAPS A LOT. I AM A VERY EXCITED PERSON. I LOVE WRITING. ISN'T THAT WHY WE'RE ALL HERE? NO I AM NOT ON DRUGS. WELCOME WELCOME ...

i prefer reading and writing in third person because you get a wider scope of the written universe. like stated above by someone or another, when you read first person, ...

i publish on various sites using a different username for each just to keep people guessing as to the origin of a story. usernames i use: horrendous gurutar Strawberry Holocaust ...

banned because i like Darker than Black