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About the same as last chapter. Good, but it didn't really go anywhere. :arrow: I really liked how the guitar was described. :arrow: The green eyed boy kinda seems to ...

Moon beams on misty roads. Blossoms glow beneath the light. The silence sings.

haha I love the ending! I love how you whate till just the last secant to say what the poem is really about. Bad phone service! :smt044 The only thing ...

I agree with Kaedee, this chapter doesn't really take the plot anywhere. Though the chair the queen uses dose remind me of the show Dollhouse (if anyone's seen that.) There ...

I like this but I think it needs a little more description of the place we are in. Because as she said that it wasn't earth so what is it? ...

Okay so this is the prophecy from my last year's NaNoWriMo novel. I really don't like it. The flow is bad, the rhyming is forced, and the ending is weird. ...

Thanks for the comments! Thanks I completely missed the 'though' 'through' thing for some reason :smt095 and yeah I think I'll change it to 'window' Thanks again!

Moon light through window, I bask in its cool crisp light, It calls down to me.

Hello kayay123, I really liked the symbolism in this poem but it had a really hard time flowing. Try spacing it out more rather then big chunks that kind of ...

Okay so I have read this in front of three audiences and have it on two other sites. I know it's not my best work--maybe not even that good--but I ...

This was awesome! I really liked all the detail you put in to this but I do think that it could have used a little more with the people themselves. ...

I completely agree with you guys. Really the only reason I had it rhyme in the first place was because I was writing it on specific request for a friend ...

I don't like this one of mine vary much but what do you guys think? ************************************ Stay with me though the cold. Don't leave me when I'm old. Stay with ...

Hello darkwriter15, This was really awesome! I really liked your use of words and metaphors. Just one little thing confused me. Pardon me if I'm just being stupid but: pulling ...

(Sorry I haven't posted in a long time...) Lisa-IAmNotYouMom "Hey ware's Lisa? Shouldn't she be helping?" said Lyric. As soon as she said that I jumped out and karate-chopped one ...